The past 2 days we did another 100 Word Challenge. The prompt was now what do I need?
The Crash
When the plane slowly lifted, I was sweating like in a Cross Country race. After two hours, the plane had this violent shake. The light suddenly switched off. A Pilot said “Mayday! Mayday!” Crash! I gently opened my eyes. I saw: Water Dripping, trees and dead bodies. I walked slowly thinking what is happening. “This is a dream.” I said. Now what do I need? I looked for equipments. I found an axe. I chopped wood like a beaver. I started to hunt for food but it looked like I was the only living creature on the island. Will I survive.
WOW! What a great story you have even though it is pretty short, still very interesting because you used lot's of interesting words. I think that if i had to write a story based on that I wouldn't be able to write as great as you! Maybe next time you should check you punctuation because at the end of the story when it said will i survive, you should have left a question mark. Anyway if you want to see my blog then here it is...
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To Angelo
ReplyDeleteHi Angelo, WOW! This is a fantastic story! The amount of detail put into this making me feel like I was there. If I did the 100 word challenge I would have 100000 words. But you should double check because you forgot a question mark ending, 'Will I survive'.
Love Mika
Yaldhurst Model School
To Angelo
ReplyDeleteI liked your descriptive language you really painted a picture in my mind when i read it and it also left me hanging on the will i survive at the end.
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