I am learning how to write a description. This writing is about my old teacher. The success criteria is to write specifically: 

• Hair
• Skin
• Face 
• Voice
• Actions   

Her blond hair is always in a ponytail even if she doesn’t have a pony tail, it is always neat and tidy. When she dashes her hair bounces. It looks like a bright long leaf tree in the autumn.

Her white smooth skin is like smooth wood. Her skin is reflecting like a mirror.  

Her blue eyes glare at me when I get told off. Her freckles are like chocolate sprinkles on cupcakes. She always puts makeup on her face. We don't know why because she looks great without it.

As she says “Hi. How are you?” It sounds interesting and fast. She always encourages us to do well or in hard times and said things like “don’t give up”. She also introduces me to new people. She always talks about how she is named after a cow.

She is different from others because she has a unique voice and she act different to others. Everyone likes how she is nice. She is good a running and other sports. She tries her best to make us smarter everyday. ..and now she is teaching at Heddon Bush. Unfortunately for us, she left.

Philippines

I am learning to write a piece of prose a sketch with detailed words, about a particular place, that is very important to me like Philippines. I know I have achieved this when I can describe this sketch of the place,in specific detail. To do this I need to:

• Use specific nouns
• Activate the nouns with strong verbs

The royal sky shining on water like a mirror. I see a grassy rice farm developing in front of my eyes. My deafening monkeys are chattering as we yell. Our muddy cars zooming beside a busy road. The busy farmers are running to get their lunch break. Dirty homeless people grabbing animals for food and money. Desperate frogs hop as they escape. A small slimy snake slither for his life.

Poem

I am learning to write a memoir poem. (This recalls a moment in time from my past that links to an emotion I felt at that time) The emotion I have chosen to link my memoir to is devastation, sadness and friendship

In my memoir I describe the scene and situation using strong adjective, nouns and verbs.

I hope you enjoy it.

The news was awful enough.

Plenty of heartbroken friends and family sobbing, attempting to cover their eyes.

The pasty tiles on the floor gathering dust by imperfect people walking on it.

A murky evening heating my skin until it has beads of sweat leaked off it.

I was devastated looking at my Grandma lying asleep forever.

A pile of friendly cousins welcoming as I walked in the lounge.

I attempt, painful  to be joyful around a group of people chattering.

Devastated, sadness, friendship.

Will I see her again?

Poem

This poem we had to right a scene and be a character in The Boy And The Stripped Pajamas. I wrote about the Jew slave in Bruno's new house. Read my last poem that I posted. Our success criteria is using a A.N.V chart (Adjective Noun Verb) and pick a character in a scene. I hope you like reading my poem.    

The house was bad Enough

I grabbed the first aid, bucket of potatoes and injured Bruno.

Rock like ash hurting Bruno on the new swing.

As I lifted Bruno a bloody cut bleeding like a gunshot.

Desolate kitchen waiting to be use.

A metal case with first aid equipment.  

Somber doctor healing Bruno with a serious cut.